Cole's new kx 85 story

As I rush out of school, I sprint so fast that my legs nearly fall off ! I jump in the car and mum steps on the gas and in no time we are at the church. I was going on a test ride on a kx 85 2 stroke! It has twice the horse power as my DRZ 125. As I leapt into dad's car all of my excitement drained. He said he didn't  have time to pick it up. The car roared to life and we surged forward and continued on home. 
When we arrived home dad called me to the shed. Then I saw a faint green thing. Dad told me to turn the light on and then there was a long silence. I turned to dad to find him staring at me with a massive smile. The green thing was a 07 Kawasaki kx 85 race bike. Then puzzled, I asked what it was doing here. 
He said it was mine!

Hamner Springs

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Ahh! My mind screams as I'm forced back into my seat when the jet engines roar to life. We're speeding down the runway at well over 150 kms an hour, gaining more and more speed. Then finally we leave the ground and meet a new terrain; the air. After a while the flight captain announced that the flight attendants would be handing out mini chocolate bars, BBQ chips, water and an oat meal biscuit. Logan and I chose the mini chocolate bar. 
What felt like ten minutes was actually about half an hour. The plane wheels met the ground and let off a massive groan. Then a massive pain occurred in my head. It felt like some one shot me in the temples! 
A few unbearable moments later. Ahh! It still hurts!
A few more unbearable moments later! Finally we screech to a halt as we arrive in Christchurch!
Now the massive search for Nana has began. It's like a jungle in here. Tall men are like the trees that tower over you. Lion cubs are the little kids yelling and play fighting. Then there are the monkeys jumping from tree to tree. Different lots of little kids represent them jumping from seat to seat. The planes are like birds about to take off. Finding Nana is like finding a needle in a haystack.
Then suddenly I see her white hair and glasses and she notices us and gives a wave. 
Then the long car trip to Hamner began.